Author Topic: The glory of Life  (Read 370 times)

Offline SwaranGaL

The glory of Life
« on: March 25, 2017, 09:57:01 PM »
Based on a random thought "Life is Simple, if we all are simple" wrote a small piece of poem. If any suggestions to improve , errors in spelling, and to modify add or remove words can reply and comments as a feedback for my poem . I am just trying something as a beginner. So kindly need do your help, to improve writing poems.

Waiting for the past to go away
Go away means not to forget or remember
Just to move away from the memories.
Memories of past can no longer be in front
So there's no use for wanting to hunt
Life's purpose is to make or act in living
To make a living happy or sad is the mystery
To spend the money or save is a authority
To speak or listen to someone is a choice,
To believe or unbelive is a remark,
To remark something valuable is knowing the worth,
To identify truth or lies is not knowing the unknown or
Knowing the unknown is detrimental, unknowingly knowing is
a sign of conscious waking
Being lost into something dreadful is the real danger
When you fall, it makes to learn the mistakes and rise again.
Falling is not in our control, but rising more stronger than ever is
under our control or limits.
No limits to the sky or sea, No force can push a stone to its mere end
No darkness can hold or stop the tunnels to break or get repairs
Nothing stays with you not even our memories or battles
Time surpasses with each moment, each step or gratitude
towards emphasizing or reflecting one's own attributes
Nothing remains constant or life is a mean of balance
Balance means order, cycle or change in adapting to
each level or different battles to uplift into
wiser and smartest version of you.

Thank you all :)

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Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #1 on: March 25, 2017, 10:24:59 PM »

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Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #2 on: March 25, 2017, 10:53:09 PM »
superb  :) keep it up

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Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #3 on: March 25, 2017, 11:03:20 PM »
Wow wave good one.. keep up the gud wrk..

Offline SwaranGaL

Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #4 on: March 25, 2017, 11:31:56 PM »
Haha Alea Nandri ...nee matum peruke etra pole mystery ah irukure en kannuku :p

@Ryan : Thank you so much for feedback :)

@ Daffy : Sis hahaha :) Thank you :) Unkite irunthu etha poem varum ethirppakuren parpom :D

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Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #5 on: March 26, 2017, 01:14:21 AM »
Wave sis I read ur poem ;) u r not learning sis:) u hv learned many things in writing poem:) the magic of ur poem is the words u have used;) read panum pothe oru attraction sis sema sis:) my best wishes for u sis :)

Offline SwaranGaL

Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #6 on: March 26, 2017, 08:22:46 PM »
@ Vipurthi sis :

Haha thanks dear :) will keep writing more....welcome to our club :D enjoy sis !

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Re: The glory of Life
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Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #8 on: April 10, 2017, 08:48:44 PM »
nice thoughts wave keep writing!

Offline SwaranGaL

Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #9 on: April 23, 2017, 01:15:39 PM »
Thank you mirage😊 btw thanks for your app. It looks so interesting hun🤗

Offline EmiNeM

Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #10 on: May 20, 2017, 07:04:25 PM »
Hi Swarangal,

Very nice poem. Its tough to think you as a beginner. Though am not a regular writer in english poems, as a reader i suggest u some points. Make sure of the sentences , try to make more or less equal.. use ; semi colon so that it can help you.  Bit more concentration when paragraphing poem.

Its a beautiful poem and am waiting for your another one.

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Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #11 on: May 29, 2017, 10:25:02 PM »
paahhh sis semma thodarnthu elutha vaazhthukkalma(F)

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Re: The glory of Life
« Reply #13 on: December 29, 2017, 11:44:25 PM »
Wave, all your poems are so meaningful and make people to think!

Keep writing! Looking forward to reading more of your words  ;)